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3 november 2023

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steve
steve

Every Moment

How do I touch your heart, the way that you touched mine?
You hold the keys to Heaven, but I can't cross the line,
You're everything I've dreamed of, the answer to a prayer...
And the only thing I need, that I need more than air,
You have the power to give me, what I've never known...
And my last chance at love, before God calls me home,
If only for a day, or an hour you were mine...
Your gift would be enough, of heaven to enshrine,
I will cherish "every moment", and everything you give...
And take with me my heart, till the last day I live.

George Krokos
11 november 2023 at 09:32

I like the tempo of this poem and subject matter, however there are a couple of lines with grammatical errors you should correct. In line 3 the first word - Your - should be You're, in the last line the phrase - Weather life or in death - should be - Whether in life or death. Regards George K.

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steve
26 november 2023 at 06:54

Hello George, thank you for the corrections... I may write, but my grammar is far from perfect. thanks for having my back........................... steve

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