Just a Dream

12/23/11

I've fallen into a rather deep slumber,
Causing me to toss, and turn, and soon to lumber
I see darkness and all, soon causing fright...
As I catch myself falling into the night
I faceplant into the earth,
Hearing something creep forth
I look up to gaze, and what do I see...?
I see myself in a memory...with you looking at me
I remember this, very well...
Because this is when in love we fell
I had decided to give you the first kiss...
And from longing, I find myself having to miss...
Now, I surge forward in time,
Feeling as if I would blow like a mine
Now, I see us through our breakup...
Guess I really fucked up...
Flashes later, I see us...back together?
I had thought that this would last forever...
Then, more flashes later,
That image had just gotten farther
I now sit where I am now...
Hopeless, guilty...the old me won't be found
Easy come, easy go,
This is how it flows
Time apart, no more spent
I have just made my ascent,
Back to being soul-less, here I come...
Back to earth, then back from...
Just...back from the fires.
The fires that burn in Hell

Jock Engelman
27 february 2012 at 21:06

i will be honest with you, if you heard me speak in common speak outside of poetry, you would be shocked by how much of a "fuken dirty mouth i am mate" to quote myself... afterall i am aussie :P but i will say that in poetry, if you can allude to such feelings as "i know now i really fuked up" then you can make it sound much much much more... emotive, cause swearing just isnt really all that shocking anymore but to say "i know the mistakes i have made have placed my path on a road i can never control, i am sorry for the things i have partaken in" that is much much more emotive... sorry mate, just some friendly suggestions...

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