I like the way the poet verses their dissatisfaction with lies in this piece... I also think if I was doing this I might edit it some more.. there are a few places with words together.. and some syntax issues.. I am assuming that you meant 'apologizes can's fix this shattered me...'? Right.. because a reader may want to fix it.. to this: 'apologies can't fix this shattered me..' also I would change atleast to 'at least..' still I like how this piece verses frustration with their loved one.. good piece.. thanks for the read, and allowing me to comment..

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