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14 october 2011

Listen to me (Version 2)


Some intolerants,
I love everybody as God does
Rreply my hello once.
 
I’m not supposed to be like HIM
I’ll be right like he need.
 
Listen to me,
How fair is your Creative?


number of comments: 3 | rating: 18 |  more 

RM,  

not so fair

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Veronika,  

what about version 3?

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Tomás Ó Cárthaigh,  

Id suggest a better edit of the poem: Some are intolerant: - I love everybody as God does - They reply to my hello once. Im not supposed to be like him - But Ill be rightous like he needs me to be. Listen to me: How fair is your creator? ========================== Thats my suggested edit. What do you think? Have I got the sentiment of the poem correct?

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other poems: Butterfly vs. Human, Another Letter, Cold Storage, Listen to me (Version 2),
 

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